What do you think of this simple poem about depression?!


Question: What do you think of this simple poem about depression.?
The Black Dragon.

The black dragon is powerful.
It writhes around me, catching me within its form,
Twisting me,
Strangling me with its tail, its claws slashing my skin.
It bellows thick smoke, blocking my eyes, clouding the world,
I drown in the darkness, whilst the black jaws gape and consume me.

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Im guessing you chose a black dragon because not only does black represent depression and morbidity but the dragon because it's powerful as you stated in the first line of the poem. I think it's a good start to something that could be amazing if you only spent a couple minutes writing it. Depression is all consuming and feels like your spiraling out of control and losing self like the poem states. So i think it got its point across. Very well done you should expand on this poem and post it later. =)Health Question & Answer

Dwelling on your depression, writing poems about it, wallowing in it, etc. is counter-productive. You should first, seek professional help (if you aren't already). Then you should set your sights on getting better. There's nothing glorious or poetic about depression.

Just my opinion...
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That does not at all describe anything about my clinical depression, it doesn't describe the loneliness, the aching depression and lethargy and wanting to die, sorry words cannot compare with the real agony of depression and not only that what it does to your family, job, health etc.Health Question & Answer

Well, it's depressing, but that's the whole point isn't it.?.?
It definitely sets clear defined images to the emotions. Now you need to figure a way to SLAY THE DRAGON! Health Question & Answer

Sounds like severe depression to me. I think it would be much better if you used something other than "The Black Dragon" to symbolize depression.Health Question & Answer

it is actually crap and a bit humorous.
i would prefer a different writer/poem.
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actually that is pretty good, very impressive. I love your creativeness. That is a great way to describe depressionHealth Question & Answer

Very effective writing. If I wasn't depressed before, I am now.Health Question & Answer

Excellent , very good description . Applause, applause!Health Question & Answer

It describes depression very well.
I like itHealth Question & Answer

I like it
It's actually pretty good
=)Health Question & Answer

its depressingHealth Question & Answer

i dunno. why did you use a dragon to represent depression.? thats kinda randomHealth Question & Answer

Its good - Explains Depression spot on !Health Question & Answer

I think you need to get help.
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its ok,but very sad.mary.c.Health Question & Answer

Its not too badHealth Question & Answer

CrapHealth Question & Answer

Wow you are deepHealth Question & Answer

its good but freaky
try somthing less darkHealth Question & Answer

nice like first lineHealth Question & Answer



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